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Review:eternalangel says:
This was a very interesting start to this story and one that pulls the readers in quite quickly. What I think I liked the most is that parts of the main characters personalities (mainly Ryan and Freddie) are established almost immediately with your opening prose. I think this is a clever way to introduce your main characters in a short amount of time.

This chapter is full of character introductions and family dynamics. I particularly liked how you gave the reader a glimpse into the different relationships Freddie has with each of his family members and how they differ with each person. I like the fact that they fight as a normal family would. I don't read a lot of Next gen fics, so keeping who was a Weasley and who was a Potter was a bit harder for me, but not enough to distract from the story.

One thing I did see refreshing to see in a next gen fic is that Albus and Scorpius were Ravenclaws and not the typical Slytherins. I also think you wrote Freddie as a realistic teenage boy doing all the good and bad things a teenage boy does.

As for teenage pregnancy issue, I found it unique that you decided to write it from the male's perspective. I'm curious to see how you handle such a topic that can be sensitive from the male's perspective.

Good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm so glad you decided to give it a shot even though you don't read a lot of next gen. I completely understand that. For ages I didn't touch it until one day I got a spark of an idea. I appreciate your feedback and I really hope you enjoy the rest of the story! I have a lot of twists and turns planned. thank you so much!

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