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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Hi there, sorry it took me so long to return your review, I was just really busy!

Wow, that's all I can say. I usually don't like reading stories that are less than 1,500 words, just because I feel that you can't do justice to any character or situation in less than that - then you came along here, the exception to my rule. It's mind blowing really.

This was so short, but it conveyed so much. Each word was chosen with deliberate care and attention and I could tell that. Some of your imaginery was mind-blowing, this in particular:

"Seconds after he finished reading those chilling words, the paper caught flame: ashes. Small, grey, dusty pieces that forever hid the truth."

WOW!

I loved the opening sentence too, it really grabs the reader and draws them in, it also conveys so much about Peter too - his regret, his cowardice, his guilt even. Really great stuff.

The last line is a killer though, really is, just sticks the knife in and twists it! PAIN!

Anyway, this is fantastic, and i have no constructive criticism to make, except that I was sort of expecting some sort of reference to Lupin, the realisation that he wasn't the spy after all or something, but that could just be me!

Brilliant stuff anyhow 10/10

Author's Response: Aww it was so sweet of you to come by! ♥

Remus did originally have his very own portion in this! Then I decided to make this a 500 word challenge, and considering I'll get my chance to write Remus's feelings revolving around this when I get to the end of Before They Fall, he had to get cut :(. Poor werewolf.

Anyway, I'm so happy you liked this, it was very emotional to write so knowing I put those kind of emotions into others makes me the happiest girl ever.

Thanks again for this amazingly perfect review ♥


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