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Review:potterfan310 says:
This is really good so far and I love Sirius/OC!
Sera is really sweet and I feel bad for her in the prologue, Her mother doesn't remember her (has she got dementia?) and her father is dead and it doesn't seem like she has any other family. Bless her.

It doesn't seem like Sera has had much of a childhood as she is her mother's main carer. I'm looking forward to find out a bit more about Sera's backstory and her family.

I'm thinking she was a quiet child, not many friends. I like how she is friends with Dorcas. She's not someone you see often.

I'm surprised to see James as head boy. I'm thinking your trying to show him as less of a trouble maker maybe?. Is Sera friends with Lily or do they become friends?

Jonathon seems like an interesting character. I think it's great to see that Sera has someone close to home who helps. Maybe he could have wrote to Sera from time to time since she say's he thinks of her and her mother like family.

It'll be interesting to see how Catie/Sirius works out especially if Sera and Sirius get together.

I think her relationship with Aaron is cute and I hope we see more of them. :D

CC
"every healing spell and potion recipe were corroded
in my mind" - It doesn't quite sound right. Maybe burned or seered.

I'm excited to read the next chapter and to see what happens. :D
10/10
-Potterfan310
P.s Is Sera French as she calls her Maman?

Author's Response: Aww, I'm so glad you like it ^^

No, she doesn't have dementia. Her memory problems have a different reasons, you'll find out something about it in the next chapter (:

She did have a proper childhood, but she's had to grow up much too soon after what happened to her parents.

James was head boy in canon, that's why he's one in my story too ^^ Sera knows Lily because they're both prefects, but that's about it.

They have, a few times, but Sera doesn't feel it's the same thing and Jonathan knows her dislike for owls so that's why he avoids it.

Her mother is French, but her dad was a Brit (:

Thank you so much for your lovely review!


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