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Review:Jchrissy says:
I've been curious about your next gen adventures, so here I am! Yay!

Okay, let me start by saying I don't read much next gen, basically only when it's requested, so I'm not going to be helpful in knowing if something actually cliche or not. But, I did notice a huge difference in what I've read and this. Rox and James are very close. Rose is a mixture of Hermione and Ron both, with some magical coordinated in there (not that Ron's NOT coordinated, he's just never really the *best* at being able to perform.) but she's also not mini copy of Hermione.

Rose nor Scorpius seem irrevocably in love with one another from the start. Thank God. Rose isn't pregnant with her enemy's child because of a one night... anyway. Again, thank goodness for that.

Al is in Gryffindor. Oh, and you've started this off with things that actually related to school. All in all, I'd say that's a pretty impressive lists of the cliches I do know being avoided.

Your characters seem realistic so far, I don't know much about them but I'm intrigued to know more - which is the best thing a first chapter can accomplish imo.

I think you have a good balance of imagery and just letting your scene play out. Too much imagery can get a bit suffocating if it's getting in the way of a story, but your descriptions enhance them as opposed to drowning it.

I also really loved that Scorpius was calling Rose the self absorbed one, because what he was saying actually made sense and made me believe him!

I think this was a really excellent first chapter, your writing is a pleasure to read ♥

yay Gryffies!

Author's Response: Oh, I love next-gen! I mean, there can be a lot of cliches, but it can also be really fun and imaginative.

I definitely tried to avoid the cliches when I wrote this. I'd read enough Rose/Scorpius fics to be able to pick them out, and part of why I wrote this in the first place was because I kept thinking, "This story would be so much better if Rose was not so deeply in love with Scorpius so quickly." Or whatever.

Thank you so much for the review, and I really, really hope that you continue to like this. It was my first fic (though it's undergone substantial editing), and while I occasionally have mixed feelings about it, overall I'm really pretty happy with it.

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