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Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
I have to admit, I fell in love with the ending of this chapter. It definitely set you up for a very interesting chapter to come. I feel like the real Sirius is beginning to show through. Nice cliff hanger!

I noticed several minor spelling and grammar mistakes throughout the chapter, but they were not extremely noticeable.

For some reason, the flow in this chapter seemed a bit ... choppy for a lack of a better word. They didn't flow as smoothly as in previous chapters. The transitions between events just seemed a bit awkward and strained.

I can definitely see the characters of Sirius and Lindsey developing throughout this chapter. I feel bad for Sirius! You've certainly given his personality your own little twist. I don't see much development in some of the other characters, though. James, for instance, really hasn't changed since the prologue. He's just been a pawn lingering in the background.

Excellent job!

Author's Response: Thank you for this review! You're a doll. I'll look into what you've pointed out. You'ave been quite helpful. :)
Hugs,
Lucky


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