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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
Hey!

So this was the cutest first chapter EVER for a Lily and Petunia story. I mean, most of them are staright in with teh angst and tension between the two sisters, but not this. It was lovely!

I like the way you characterised Petunia- she wasn't immediately recognisable as the 'bad guy' or the person who would be causing grief in their relationship. She wasn't as sweet as Lily, but everyone has different personalities nayway and it's not just black and white. It was really refreshing to see and read. Then, of course, Lily was just adorable! I sometimes forget that Petunia is the older sister actually, but I can't imagine it any other way after reading this.

Sometimes paragraphs seem a little rushed- take your time writing! Seriously :) But apart from that this was gorgeous.
-LWG

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you! I just wanted to show that Lily and Petunia didn't always truly hate each other. I mean, obviously, there was a reason; Petunia was jealous of Lily. I've always thought that happens later on when Lily gets her letter.

I'm glad you liked Petunia's characterization. :)

Yeah, I'm working on improving, I'll try to keep my paragraphs from seeming rushed.

Again, thanks for the review!

~Rosie


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