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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, there! Thanks so much for doing your part to help Gryffindor take the cup! Here is your review.

Wow. This is an amazingly powerful vision you have here. Between review swaps and the House Cup and just general interest, I've read a lot of Next Gen stories. And I've never read anything close to the concept of "Dominique Weasley: Pureblood Destroyer of Worlds". I know that probably sounds mocking, but it isn't. The way you've presented this is so powerful and gripping. We know very well from the books how dangerous the Mirror of Erised is. But that danger was always portrayed as mostly affecting the viewer. The possibility that one might lose one's self in the fantasy world of the mirror and never return to reality. This was a whole different vision of the dangers of unrestrained fantasy made real, and it was even more frightening.

Your portrayal of Dominique as the prototypical unremarkable middle sibling fed perfectly into the events that were to come. It made all of her needs and desires perfectly sensible. It was sad, in a way, but you have to temper that sadness with the clear realization that she has lived a life of relative ease and privilege. You can't feel too badly for her, in spite of what I guess you'd called her "rich wizarding girl problems".

The mirror quickly cuts to the core of who and what she is. What you created there was truly terrifying. The parallels you were able to draw to Voldemort, that Dominique was able to draw to Voldemort, were unnerving at a deep level. There's an obvious note of self-deception here, but that's what the mirror excels at. As her feelings of inadequacy and neglect slowly morph into ambition and hate, it was frighteningly plausible. I thought the crowning touch of the whole piece was how she even managed to scare the mirror, itself. This ancient, all-knowing presence that has seen the hearts of countless people was even alarmed at what it found.

I did notice two relatively minor typo's that you might want to take a second look at:

-- "Her cheeks burned as red as her hair, something which would of never happened to her beautiful sister." - would have

-- "She girl didnít understand what I was, she thought, just like her Uncle, that I was a mere fortune teller." - The girl didn't...

Otherwise, your writing was lovely. Everything flowed nicely and you had a terrific mix of narrative, dialog and the mirror's inner monologue.

I love this story. Perhaps someday you can give us your vision of the rise of Dominique Weasley.

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