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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again!

Grammar/Spelling: Same thing I mentioned about a beta reader! :D It will help a lot, I promise.

Characterization: Okay! So, we've got Rosie-dear in this one. I think you're doing quite well! I have a younger sister and I can totally imagine her getting embarassed at sixteen if my parents wanted to say goodbye to her on the platform. Then again, she's a Slytherin on Pottermore, so I guess we would have disowned her anyway. :D Kidding! Sort of. Anyways, well done!

Descriptions: Same thing I mentioned about bringing this to life with details! That could also really help lengthen the chapter which would help a lot. This was impossibly short. :[

Emotions: I liked that I could sense Rose's embarassment and disdain for her family in this chapter. Good job! If you lengthen it, make sure to show other emotions too.

Plot: So, this chapter was really, really short. I'm sure you could add more in about the train ride or other things that happened before you cut it off. It would help keep the plot moving forward and keep up reader interest. :]

I think you did pretty well with this chapter, despite the fact that it was short. Keep up the good work!


Author's Response: Thank you again! I'll do my best to adjust my work! :)

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