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Review:Jchrissy says:
Wow, I think this was a really powerful and moving one shot.

You did an amazing job of really helping me feel what Roxy was feeling, and every sentence seemed to terrify me as much as it did her. I loved the repetition of 'I'm going to die' and 'just breathe.'

okay, so the next part I have is a bit of CC and it's totally opinion based, feel free to take it with a grain of salt. The Weasleys were raised by very loving attentive parents. Parents really understand their child, even if they might not know exactly what's going on, a good parent will always know when something has 'gone too far.' With that being said, I don't see her being in this desperate of the situation without some serious intervention from her parents.

Obviously intervention wouldn't cure it, bit I do see them taking some kind of serious action to gain the tools of how to help it. I think that George saying - you know what the therapist said, or - you know what the hearler said - you just need to _ . To show that they were taking this seriously, because I think any parent would regardless of if their child is trying to hide it from them .

Like I said, that's totally just an opinion and takes nothing away from your writing. This was a truly amazing piece that grew more powerful with every sentence.

Great job!

Jami

Author's Response: Hi Jami,

Thank you very much for reviewing! It was really kind of you both to offer! :D

Oh, I'm really glad you experienced this alongside Roxy (though hope you weren't scared too much!).

Yey, CC :D That's a really interesting perspective and I completely understand where you're coming from. In my mind, they're very aware of the situation but just not of how much its bothering her. Most people have never heard of thanatophobia - and therefore her having panic attacks or refusing to sleep could just be a way of attention-seeking (as horrible as it may sound). I think they'd be aware but just not fully appreciate how bad it has come.

There would be a stopping point at some point - a moment of realisation. From that, I imagine they'll seek help for her. This is kind of the 'calm before the storm'. :P

I do fully appreciate what you're saying and I was considering to extend this one-shot, so if I decide to continue then I will definitely address this much more!

Thanks so much for leaving such an in-depth review! Keira :)


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