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Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
This chapter was, so far, not my favorite. Nevertheless, it was enjoyable, realistic, and fast-paced. Additionally, I like your use of quotes at the beginning of each chapter. They relate very well to your storyline.

I did have one question: Why do you keep switching between Lindsey and Sirius' point of view in the middle of chapters? It takes me awhile to adjust from reading about one character to abruptly transitioning to the narration of another.

Also, I found a Quidditch-playing Remus to be an interesting, yet original twist. I don't believe I've read about a similar occurrence in any other fanfiction, and he certainly didn't come across as exceptionally athletic in the books.

As a side note, how could there have been no changes to the Gryffindor Quidditch Team in two years? The seeker would have only been in his second year, and, according to Professor McGonagall, that would have been a rarity.

Ah, Sirius. His character has developed slightly over the first several chapters, but still leaves readers asking questions regarding his personality and behaviour. I'm not sure if you were aiming for an air of mystery, but you certainly achieved it.

Nice job!

Author's Response: I guess the switching is a matter of opinion, some people love it, others hate it. I stole it from Robert Jordan, probably the coolest writer of all time (in my humble opinion). I'll definitely check to see if I can make the chapter more cohesive. I don't quite remember if I said anything about a seeker, but if I made that mistake, I'll go fix it. *blush* ;) Yes, I was aiming for mystery and I'm glad I achieved it.
Hugs,
Lucky

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