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Review:Wistful says:
Hey, hidden_secrets-!
Its Wistful here with your requested review. ^_^

This was, without doubt, a really good read. It was just so dramatic... and the ending. Just really well written. Its even cookie worthy xD The whole thing really flows welll, and it is really a super duper good read.

Now, I'm going to start with the nitpicking. "Stop her making the biggest mistake of her life" here you are missing the 'from' between her and making. "Not now she has left me all alone in the dark, hidden away from the world because" I think it would "not that now" there. "I go to bed, my mind still fully awake and don't sleep" here it seems like you're saying the mind didn't sleep when I think you meant Draco, clarify that? Okay, finshed that part.

"stars twinkle like the eyes of the dead are watching me, whispering to me," That was just beautiful. I loved that line. I re-read it three times xD. It really was a beautiful line. To be honest, you had a lot of beautiful lines though out this. It really was just poetic and really emotional.

That was one of the best parts, how you really expressed the emotion in this. I could really see it though the lines and in the flow. Many writers find it hard to do but you got it down flat. And the flow. It was just brilliant. I mean all the wording just fitted like... perfect. Really good job.

Our characterization. I could really feel that Draco was aware of how he should be like and his pasts. He had expectations. He was rich so he expected a beautiful wife and that lot. And he thought about the war. About the pain and terror. I could see that. The main problem with the characterization [because otherwise it was just great] is he killed Pansy. One of the biggest things about Draco is that he didn't kill Dumbledore, its like the base of his good side. But as this is the shock of the fic, you can't really change that.

And the end... Gosh, the end just stopped my heartbeat for a moment. No lies. It was just that good. Even though its kind of un-cannon, I odn't really care because it was just that good. Hear that? Just. So. Good. It really was s sudden jolt, really ending it great.

-Wistful

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And sorry for taking so long to reply :(

Ooohh, cookie worthy! YAY! That is good news!

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes, I'll just go and fix them :D

Oh wow, re-read that line three times! I'm glad you liked it, that's one of my favourites too x

I never thought about that :/ I know, I'm always like, 'Draco would never have killed Dumbledore, that he had some good in him'... and then I wrote this. Hmm, well when I started it, I didn't know who I was writing until near the end, and then I didn't know he killed her until I wrote that last line :/ And yeah, I can't really change that. Well, thanks for pointing that out anyway. x

Thanks, I'm glad the ending was good :)

Thank you so much, this was such an awesome review! x


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