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Review:Jchrissy says:
I'm still trying to sort out where I want to start out in your series style stories (Unsinkable is constantly getting praises from Mel) so I thought in the mean time I'd start with this happy one shot :)!

I live for imagery. Not so much that I'm sofficated - but by the end of a chapter or story I just want to feel like I was there. This really achieved that. I could see Ginny with her arms piled high and a pair of socks about to tumbling off, and Hermione is completely stuck with watching Ron. I loved that you maintained her logical mind, when she's thinking about Rons physically attributes she's reasoning that it shouldn't be attractive, yet her jaws about to hit the floor. I just think its a really great way to show her emotions (coich* hormones* cough) taking over but still stay true to her Hermiome side.

I adore the addition in the beginning regarding mowing a lawn being character building is absolutely perfect. It was very, very Molly - followed by the taunting of the twins of course.

This was such a pleasant read, thank you for sharing!!

Jami

Author's Response: I am so glad the scene-setting description was good - there's a lot of it in the Hermione POV section and I tend to linger over dialogue so that is definitely a good thing that it reads all right :)

Ah Hermione, feeling so much and keeping it inside until she bursts ;) Poor Ron doesn't get it for so long haha... She knows he's not actually super hot but she wants him anyway - to her, Ron is a hot guy!

Molly seems to like giving out chores to be done without magic and then trotting out the old "builds character" excuse haha. After so many sons, who can blame her?

Thank you for reviewing! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story :)


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