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Review:Jchrissy says:
Blah! This was such a beautiful and tragic story. It almost feels a bit chaotic with the changing scenes, but in a very good way. Nothing is tangible, it's almost like I feel the memory being ripped away - but it was never concrete because there were just small bits of what she had being relayed to us. It was just such a great and realistic way to set this all up and really strengthened the piece.

Your descriptions are heart breaking, I feel so bad for Mary and Arthur both. Jenny, too, of course. But I can't help but imagine the man in the Notebook as Arthur, completely broken without his other half.

Being magical would have so many amazing qualities, but then there are these things that even magic can't help. The deterioration of the mind would be such a terrible thing to experience, you matched her confusion with fear perfectly. Especially when Arthur was first taking her into St. Mungo's and she was thinking to herself that she's not crazy.

This was a very impressive one shot, I don't think I even have any CC for you!

Great job!!

Jami

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing, this was so lovely to read.

I fiddled around with the layout for ages actually, trying to get that smoky, not-quite-real tone, because it is from teh point of view of someone who really doesn't know what's happening anymore. I'm so happy you think I've done it well :D.

I wrote Jenny to be getting a bit impatient with the whole thing actually, when she slammed the door etc. I don't know if that's realistic or not, but I thought that would be her attitude. But Arthur, oh poor Arthur! You're so right actually- it is a bit like the ending of the notebook (love that film). Especially the part where Allie and Noah are dancing and then Allie forgets who he is and thinks he's attacking her. That's the same sort of confusion and terror that I wanted to capture in this.

Yeah, I chose to write about Alzheimer's because I didn't see a way that magic could cure it. It is purely a mental disease, and all they can really do at St Mungos is monitor her progress.

Thank you Jami!
-Annon


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