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Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
Before I begin my review, I would like to say that I was very impressed by this chapter. So far, this is one of the best marauders era fanfictions I have read in a very long time.

I would like to applaud you for your originality in creating James' sister as a main character. I don't believe I have previously read a fanfiction in which James even has a sister. This surprised me at first, but I believe the idea is beginning to grow on me.

I was slightly confused toward the beginning of the chapter when Lindsey, Lily, James, and Sirius were conversing on the train. It was a bit of a challenge to distinguish who was contributing to what conversation. I was a little lost.

Additionally, I didn't quite understand the relationship between Lindsey and Regulus. During their initial interactions, it seemed as if they were complete strangers. However, as they began to talk, Lindsey's train of thought led me to believe that they had been friends for awhile. You might want to change these conflicting thoughts.

Lastly, I enjoyed Sirius' reaction to finding Lindsey conversing with Regulus. It seemed right on cue.

Excellent job!

Author's Response: Wow, way to make me blush. ;) Yeah, the train scene was a bit thrown together, I'm currently in the editing process. I'll try to make the Lindsey/Regulus dynamic a little clearer as well. :) Thank you so much for this reivew.
Hugs,
Lucky


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