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Review:CambAngst says:
I thought this was really, really lovely. One of the things that gets a little tiresome about the slash/femme slash stories I've read -- and maybe my sample is just too small -- is that so many of them are unrequited love stories. And while it took Pansy a while to come to her senses in your story, she actually does seem to come around. I really liked that.

I thought your portrayal of Pansy's relationship with Draco was very nicely done. He just isn't very good to her. The books always made that rather clear. He treats her more like a plaything than a person.

Pansy's endless attempts to please Draco and Daphne's patient support for her friend were also done well. It went a long way toward developing the idea that the two were friends before they became something more. It also set the stage so that when Daphne's affection was revealed, it didn't seem sudden or out of place.

Your writing was very good in this. Everything flowed nicely and you had a good mix of narrative and dialog. I didn't see any typos or grammatical problems.

Very well done!

Author's Response: Hey Dan! I really appreciate you stopping by!

I agree - I see it a lot as well, and the plot line does get a little tiresome. I kind of wanted to play with the idea that Pansy would have lost so much when she lost Draco, given how she put him on a pedestal, and that she would need a rock of a friend like Daphne at that time. Then, I just extended the idea a little bit.

He really isn't. I'm never really sure if they were actually a couple or if he really did just let her be around when it was convenient for the entire series. I'm inclined to assume the latter, given how he married Astoria in the end. I'm happy you liked my portrayal of him.

I worked hard to try to build up the relationship throughout this piece, so it's great that it all worked for you. I wanted it to seem sort of natural and sensible there at the end.

Thanks so much for this very kind review :)

-Amanda


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