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Review:Wistful says:
A brilliant one-shot, Violet!
I really like a good Regulus but there really aren't too many I honestly like.

First thing I though when I read this was: Amazing writing. Second reaction? What in Merlin's beard is she talking about?
After I finished reading, I got a grasp of it though xD

Really, I just loved the way you write this. You really expressed what Regulus was thinking and soon and feeling in an original way that was just so poetic and well-written.

He didn't seem particularly sad about. Just remorseful and accepting. I'm glad how you write Kreacher into this as that house elf really did love his master, in my opinion. Everything transited smoothly, your wording was just great.

You aimed for abstract. You got abstract.
I don't really get what some of your references are, bubI usually get what it symbolizes in the big picture.

It does seem sort of incomplete though. Can't put my hand on what. On the over hand, your spelling and grammar was almost flawless.

Amazing, Violet.
Just amazing.


Author's Response: Ooh, first review! :D Thank you very much for stopping by - I appreciate that you took the time to read and review this story. It's wonderful that you liked it so much!

Haha, it is a strange one. I let my brain do what it wanted, drifted through Regulus's childhood dreams into his place among the Death Eaters, a place that doesn't suit him very well - he's too much of a dreamer, which means, of course, that when his illusions are shattered, he becomes dangerously disturbed. I've wanted to write another abstract story for a few months, and it's an interesting experience, even if it gives the reader a lot more work. Yes, I tend to include an insane number of references, but it's not necessary to know them - like you said, the general gist of things is more than enough to understand the action. :)

The part of this story that surprised me the most when writing was how accepting of the end Regulus was. He didn't care about himself - he didn't even have much of a personal identity, thanks to his bringing up. He cared instead for others - Sirius, Kreacher - and he lived through them, to a large degree.

I agree that something seems missing at the end. I tried a few different ways of ending it, but none of them seem to have the right feeling, and I still can't figure out what it is that's not there. This isn't the first time this has happened with a one-shot - more than likely, I rushed to finish it and didn't wait for the right ending to come along. Hopefully it'll hit me soon. :)

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