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Review:TenthWeasley says:
Hello! TenthWeasleyWriter here with your requested review, and I'm sorry about the small delay. :)

Right away the first thing I noticed is that this is really written pretty well, and as someone who's rather finnicky about grammar in the first place, it's so nice to read a story like this. Not having to stumble over missed commas or misspellings makes the whole chapter flow much more smoothly, and it's appreciated by readers in general -- not just me! Especially since you've said English wasn't your first language -- you write better than many people who speak it fluently! :P There were only a couple of slips I found on that front:

A small bubbly laughter filled the room. -- The word 'laughter' seems rather off when used here. Perhaps consider changing it to 'laugh' instead?

every healing spell and potion recipe were corroded in my mind -- I'm not sure the word 'corroded' is the correct one in this sentence. 'Burned' or 'imprinted' might work better, or a synonym to them! :)

As for characterization, I don't think you've got much to worry about there! I'm rather interested in Sera, and especially Sera's mother. I'm curious what you've got in store for her, and what exactly happened to her mother to put her in the state she's currently in -- was it the death of her husband? You've already evoked plenty of sympathy for both of the characters, and in only the first chapter, which is a good thing. :)

All in all, I think that you're off to a very good start here! This was an enjoyable read, and you've provided a nice hook into the rest of your story. Thank you for taking the time to request a review from me!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks ^^

I agree, it's so much more nicer to read something where you don't get distracted with grammatical errors all the time.

Thanks for pointing those out! I'll edit them as soon as possible!

I'm glad you like them all ^^ first chapters and OCs are always the hardest. I'm very happy that you found them to be interesting!

Thank you again for such a lovely and helpful review!

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