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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
So it was interesting the way you decided that Remus would learn about death through the gnomes. I don't really know how old Remus is supposed to be in this, but I don't remember ever having to be told what death was...I don't know, it was very interesting. And I have to say, if ever death had to be explained, the way Remus's dad did it was pretty spot on.

Your writing is really nice- considering this was basically a whole chapter about gnomes, it was pretty amazing that I wasdefinitely gripped by the story. I haven't read many with young Remus's in but the language you used was good at conveying Remus's young age (you had the tone of a child), if a little unrealistic/overdone :P

Something I really liked was the way Remus thought it was all a game- 'Remus didnít know why the gnome was scared because it was all a game'. I thought that was a very intriguing line, and representative of a child's love to play and not take things seriously.

Remus's reaction towards the gnome's death- guarding the spot where the gnome was buried and stuff- was very realistic, I thought. I remember doing that when I stood on a ladybug once :P

This was thoughtful, well written and extremely interesting. I really enjoyed it!
-LWG

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!

You say you don't know how old Remus is supposed to be in this, he's three, as shown:

"For now, Remus had to wait, because he wasn't big yet. He was only three. Three was small, Daddy said. But Remus thought that three was big, very big, miles bigger than two."

That's mad that you don't remember ever being told about Death. I remember being told when I was four. And I ended up having to explain it to my five year old cousin when my gran died. So I sort of based this fic on that. I'm glad that you thought I had Remus's dad pretty spot on though :-) I just felt I had to include this chapter, because this fic just doesn't tell the story of Remus's life, it tells the story of his pain. His life was as scarred by death as Harry's was, so I just really wanted to show that right from the off.

I'm glad that you thought the language conveyed Remus's young age, but I just wished you elaborated more on why you thought it was unrealistic/overdone. I've based this on my little cousin and I worked so hard to get it realistic, so if you thought there were parts that were unrealistic or overdone I'd like to know, so I can fix it...

I'm glad you liked the game idea - and you've hit the nail on the head, it is representative of how a child's love of playing and taking nothing seriously.

I'm also glad that you liked Remus guarding the grave at the end. That's mad that you remember doing the same thing for a ladybird, I think all kids do at some point!

Anyway, glad you found this interesting, even if it was only about gnomes.

Thanks for the review


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