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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hey there, marissa lily potter here with the review you requested.

I'm a big fan of next generation, especially Rose and Scorpius so to see them in a setting where I've never seen them before is very intriguing for me. I love this story. Everything from the way the chapter started, to the italics in between and the attention to detail!

Your characterizations were very good. In a matter of a little bit, I felt like I had known Rose and Scorpius forever. They're both extremely well developed and I felt very much a part of the story. I love that feeling, where I feel like I'm not just reading someone else's story but that I'm part of the story, kind of watching from a third party perspective like a pensieve of a sorts.

I think the descriptions were amazing. They really created the mood for the story and set everything up so nicely. Even with a lot left up for interpretation, the descriptions were great and I'm pretty sure that you wanted to leave things open so the descriptions did a great job doing that! Along with the descriptions, the imagery was fantastic.

The setting was so vivid thanks to all the imagery and I could actually picture the scene happening before my eyes which was extremely nice to picture. As far as evoked emotions go, I think you did a wonderful job letting the readers connect with the story. This connection made it possible to feel every emotion that the characters felt.

I really liked this story. I'm usually not a horror/dark kind of person although I will read it but I was quite surprised to find myself liking this story a lot! It was well executed, the characters were developed extremely well, it was perfectly relatable and overall, well written! You're a fantastic writer and I love your work! Great job with this story :)

Thank you so much for requesting a review. It was a pleasure to read this!

-Marissa

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much!

I'm such a sap for NextGen too and I'm always looking for something different, you know - maybe that's why I wrote this. I'm really glad that you liked it!

Thank you for that compliment about my characterizations! They're usually pretty solid now that I've been writing for several years, but sometimes they get a little wonky, you know. I'm so super glad you felt like you were a part of the story - that is definitely one of my biggest things when it comes to writing. I felt like JKR made me a part of her magical world, so I think that readers should connect with my story and get wrapped up in it. I think it interesting that you called it a pensieve - I believe that's how a reader should feel (perhaps Rose felt the same herself because of the trauma).

Oh, I'm just over the moon! Descriptions are my strong point and I always, always, always want to make sure that they're what most readers find pleasing or good or intriguing. Yes, I definitely left a lot to interpretation - I was taught that you should make the reader work for it, per se, and that readers are not stupid, so making them think/interpret/analyze will help others to connect with the story.

I'm really glad you found that the emotions really helped to connect the reader. I'm an advocate of the idea that as individuals, we all perceive, think, feel, in our own unique ways and no one can truly understand what we're going through - therefore, that's why we write - we write so that we can try to convey what's going on, to get that human connection.

I'm really glad you liked this even though horror/dark isn't your thing. That puts some readers off, you know, so I'm really excited that you liked it!

Thank you so much for your lovely review! I really appreciate it! :)

Shelby


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