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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey, this is AditiDraco95 from the forums with your requested review.

I quite liked reading this piece. I think it was a very sweet tale of a mother reflecting on her daughter's past. I liked the way you portrayed Hermione and Ron, it felt realistic enough. The yearbook idea was good too.

You had a couple of grammar and spelling mistakes though, for which I suggest you getting a Beta edit them for you. Once the mistakes are fixed, your story can flow better. Also, I suggest improving more on your dialogue. Your dialogues somehow interrupted the narrative and weren't very cohesive, so if you eased them more into the story, it would be good.

Overall though, I liked reading this little story. It was a nicely thought piece. Good job on this. You sure have room for improvement =)

7.5/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey thanks for reviewing!
I'm glad you thought it was realistic and that it was a good idea.
I will be going over this to edit it so thanks for telling me :)


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