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Review:CambAngst says:
Yay! Things are finally looking up for dear Pansy!

But before I get to that point, I'm developing a suspicion that things are not well with her mother. Your description at the start of this chapter seemed almost sickly. She also seems to be withdrawing, spending less time outside of her chambers. Her optimism for her husband is so sad and misplaced. I have a feeling that I can foresee at least one crisis that Pansy will be dealing with in the future.

It sounds as though Pansy has descended into the rarely-traveled bowels of the Ministry to find the archives. Must be very intimidating for a person who's so used to being surrounded by cleanliness and order.

I liked the way you portrayed Mr. Craddle. He seemed very eccentric and mercurial, but he also had a kind way about him. Somebody who would probably be fun to work with once you got to know him. I did think that you could have given us a little more of a physical description of the man. You find many different types of men in bars and gambling halls, after all. ;)

It's going to be very interesting to watch Pansy interact with her new coworkers. Given her upbringing, I can't help but imagine that she'll find some of them beneath her. Well, alright, she'll probably find all of them to be beneath her, but the ones who are not in a position of authority over her will probably bother her a lot more. This will be a huge test of her commitment to restoring her family's reputation.

This chapter was short, but very well written. I couldn't find anything in terms of typos or grammatical problems.

Until next time!

Author's Response: Thanks once again for taking the time to read and review!

Yes, things are indeed finally looking up for Pansy. She's finally gotten a job, which will support her financially as she tries to restore her family's reputation.

You are correct in that her mother's not doing so well and there will be a crisis for her to deal with in the future... However, I'm not going to say just how far into the future this crisis will occur. :)

The archives aren't a very popular place because not many departments and businesses feel the need to utilize it. However, it is a necessary part of the Ministry- it would be foolish not to store information in an organized manner.

I see what you mean about his description. I thought that I had included more of a physical description of him, throughout the later part of the chapter, but I suppose the idea was more in my head than on paper...

Yes, there will definitely be some conflicts between Pansy and her co-workers. However, she'll be very aware of the fact that her every interaction with them affects her reputation and will try to be cautious with her words. That might not work out so well, though...

The next chapter should hopefully be up in a week's time!


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