There were so many little one-liners in here, that it's hard to pick a favorite - which is what I seem to do with a lot of your stories. This chapter was just adorable - and I total envy your ability to write like eleven year old boys with such an apparent EASE. I write them too, but I always freak out and wonder what I'm doing wrong. I'm wholly jealous.
I think the biggest thing I take away from this moment is the interactions, or the first thoughts, of Ron looking at Harry in those first stages of their friendship! I mean, you introduced us to his family in the first chapter, and his interactions with them - but Harry really becomes that 'lost brother' to him! So it was like you showed his real family in one chapter...and his extended in another. And that's just awesome, really.
It really makes a reader think - because here we have seen Ron, who has a HUGE family and lots of love, but he's stuck with his little grey rat. And then we have Harry, with the owl of Ron's DREAMS - but no family. A kid who's so desperate to HAVE that family, too. I was waiting for Ron to wake up and REALIZE that, and I can just picture him starting to get real hints of that with other scenes we know that's to come in the books - like with the mirror or Erised.
You break my heart, girl!
I'll hilight my two favorite lines - not the funny ones, specifically, but the ones that really got me - just because I like doing that when I find 'em.
Ron stole another glance at the boy sitting next to him in the boat. With his knobbly knees and thin shoulders, Harry didn't look like he'd ever had much to eat. That he'd share his chocolate frogs with a relative stranger showed a kind of openness and generosity that Ron reckoned he'd value in a friend.
Just...so Ron. It's like 'Yeah - he shares his stuff with me. I think I'd like him as a friend'. It's that first friendship stuff - you don't really focus TOOO much on the fact that hey, he's just a really nice guy so I should stick with him. He seems nice...so I reckon he's okay.
'Harry Potter had conquered death before he was even out of nappies. Ron Weasley was about to start at Hogwarts and he hadnít even conquered his fear of the dark.'
I just...okay, I can't even distinguish why I love this line so much - but it just ENCAPSULATES Ron. It's all those insecurities and jealousies he continues to show when he's older in big, bad outbursts all caught up in eleven year old insecurities. I love, love, love it.
Author's Response: I love eleven year old Ron. I love writing him; what does it say about me that I'm more comfortable writing from a child's POV than a teen or an adult?!
Once again, you have written an amazingly thoughtful review and I'm again astounded by the perception you show in your reading! (also you keep making me look cleverer than I am) Are you an English lit student!?
So, your comments about Ron's 'lost brother', about the owl and the rat and the families, and the mirror of Erised. Well, it's just lovely to read your reviews. You should open a review thread, your insight is so valuable.
'Yeah - he shares his stuff with me. I think I'd like him as a friend'. - hahahaha, this IS so Ron. Not just ickle Ron, but Ron.
Thank you so very much for taking the time to do these reviews, and thank you again for giving Pop Goes The Weasel 1st place in the Daddy Dearest challenge. The inspiration I got from that challenge was fab... you sparked what's going to probably be a novella!
Thank you thank you thank you! (and get well soon!)