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Review:CambAngst says:
Ugh! Sometimes I can't help but get frustrated with Godric. He's such a meat-head. Surrounded by friendly kinsfolk and he still can't help but insult them the moment he gets free of the mirror. I guess that's what being the alpha-male is all about.

OK, I'll admit it right up front: I was a little disappointed that you didn't make it more difficult and complicated for Degeus and Hermione to find one another. Or at least more time-consuming. Perhaps confrontational. I was prepared and even rather excited for Hermione to have some sort of adventure in the course of finding her way to Gryffin Castle. Perhaps even deal with another of Salazar's assassins. I feel like you skipped over something fairly significant there, since you created so much tension around it at the end of the last chapter. In fact, I should probably go back and make sure that you didn't rewrite the end, because I know you were planning to edit it. Don't go anywhere for a sec, OK? ... Alright, I'm back. So my suggestion remains. I think there was a real opportunity to give Hermione another great moment. At any rate, enough about that.

I'm glad that besides being hopelessly in love with Godric, or perhaps because she's hopelessly in love with him, she's finally decided that she needs to know everything about him, including why he's trapped in the dark glass and why he has this self-loathing streak. Overall, this was a good chapter for her emotionally. She figured some things out, she seems to be getting better centered and more of that strong determination was coming through.

I liked you brief rumination on alpha males and what makes them tick. Every time you delve into Hermione's mind like that, it adds to the depth of her character. The same goes for Godric.

Your description of the castle through Hermione's eyes was breath-taking and also says something about her. The particular details she focuses on and the things that seem important to her. All of them continue to build and round out her character.

Then she releases Godric from the mirror and he goes full-on alpha-meathead. I completely get his need to be alone with her, but he over-does it by a mile. He's sort of comical that way.

It seems that Drustan has picked up on his tattoos. You made reference to them a few chapters ago. He seems to be gearing up for something big and not entirely wholesome. Hopefully Hermione can make him see reason before he makes a bad situation worse.

Overall, a pretty good outing. I just would have loved to see you make something great out of the time that Hermione and Dageus spend searching for one another. That's all. Still enjoying the story very much and kind of bummed that we're getting near the end.

Author's Response: I must admit that you make a great suggestion about the beginning of the chapter. Even after I finished writing this chapter and posting I felt that something was missing but I guess after looking at this story for so long I just couldn't see what it was.
I will be sure to keep them in mind, when my beta and I go back over this chapter. I will be sure to let you know if I change anything big so that you can go back and read it.
Thank you for faithfully sticking with this story and for all the wonderful insight you have brought to it.

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