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Review:Cavell says:
*sneaks in ... sneakily* Erm, hi Amanda *awkward wave* Woops? Just because of my own stupidity and late-ness, I'm going to give you an extra long review, m'kay? *deep breaths* Get ready!

The Lily-Regulus scene was awesome. It wasn't too dramatic with me expecting them to do an Unbreakable Vow or something, but it wasn't too casual either with me thinking is that it? It had just a bit of everything - some uncertainty since they don't really know each other all that well, kind of tense and ohmygosh... can I just say brava? Definitely makes sense, I, myself would ask Regulus to do something in return if I was Lily, which of course I already obviously knew would happen from the summary and it really lived up to expectations :)

James was brilliant, I loved the opening scene. I thought that it was a nice touch, being with the Marauders for once, instead of always staying with Lily and Regulus, so good twist! James' routine made me smile - sadly, at his thoughts of how the others would react if they knew what he was doing, but smile all the same.

Surprisingly enough, the differences between Severus/Regulus and Sirius/James weren't all that, well, different. Sure, Severus is a little more hesitant around Regulus than Sirius is with James, but the scene when Snape was crying in the common room bonded them a bit, if you know what I mean :) I also liked the evolution of the Marauders' Map! It's nice to think that the four are human, too, and didn't just make it in a matter of months and that they're still working on things like adding names.

All in all, another brilliant chapter, and I can't wait for the next ;) I'll definitely been keeping an eye on this, that's for sure, and sorry again for the super long wait!

Author's Response: Hi Linn! No worries, seriously - I don't consider this late at all, and thank you for coming by :)

I'm so happy that the 'pivotal' scene in this chapter worked well for you. I was trying to make it realistic, so yeah, if it had seemed too over-the-top or too subtle, that wouldn't have been so good. I'm glad that you felt like characterization was on point there as well.

I'm happy you liked the twist! The more I toy with James, the more interesting he becomes to me. I don't think his friends would be really mean to him if they knew about his little habit - very different, naturally, from how Severus's friends would react - but they would definitely tease him a little, I think. I just wanted to show that the confident Gryffindor boy has a softer side, too, and his share of secrets.

Interesting! They should be a little different, but not too much, I guess. I want it to seem like Regulus and Severus are bonding, just not as quickly as James and Sirius bonded. That map would definitely take more than a semester or two to create, I think, and I'm glad you're enjoying watching it come to life.

Thanks so much for this wonderful review! I'll be by to request again when I get the next chapter posted! :)

-Amanda


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