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Review:Analesh7 says:
I liked this! I really liked how you portrayed Remus as the narrator here. From reading the prologue I knew this was going to be good because I was ready to see how Remus saw all the Marauder business go down. I thought it was a great idea to add "Neil Insight" and "word of the wise" it makes the story so much enjoyable and adds a humorous side!

You really surprised me with making Lily be part of the Quidditch team. I was like woah! never seen that before. So that was a great twist which makes me think why James would like Lily more. All that extra time practicing would sure enough have deepened his feelings. Not only is Lily smart but like Quidditch: Jame's perfect girl.

Now for Sirius. I just love him. He has the perfect balance of arrogance and quirkiness!

I think the plot is definitely going somewhere. I can see room for character development and conflict. Grammar was also on point.

What I didn't like of the chapter was Lily dating Snape. As devout Lily/James shipper I can't see that happening. But I'm hoping that James will win her heart!!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I worked hard to incorporate the small pieces of humor, which wasn't always easy. Originally, I thought readers would despise them, but hearing your comment really encouraged me to continue adding them.

I added Lily to the Quidditch team for several reasons. I hoped it would prevent this piece from becoming a cliche fanfiction that readers quickly became bored while reading. Additionally, I thought it would provide a slight twist to my fanfiction. I'm glad to see you enjoyed it.

Sirius, was, by far, the hardest character for me to write about. He appears in hundreds of fanfictions, each of which portray him differently. I'm trying to stick as close to the books as possible, so, hopefully, I have succeeded.

Lastly, I couldn't help inserting the paragraphs regarding Snape and Lily dating. At the time, I realized that it would, most likely, receive a handful of negative comments from Lily/James shippers like yourself. However, I was willing to take the risk.

Thank you,
Voldy Needs a Hug

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