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Review:CharlieDay says:
Hi! I'm finally here with your review and I just realised how long i took... wow! Sorry! I hope this somewhat makes up for it.
I thought the use of second person was very good, and it's very unusual so you certainly did well there.
There were only a few issues throughout the piece, but nothing a quick read-through wouldn't fix. The only really nagging issue that I thought I'd point out was the fact that you constantly capitalised 'him.' Now, I'm pretty sure that the only time it is generally done to capitalise 'him' is when referring to God, and even then rather than being correct, it's just the way it's done.
I very much liked your wording in this piece. It was quite ethereal, and I can really see the idea of it being in Voldermort's moment of death. I think the way you made him know he was going to die was wonderful, personally. It was just sort of amazing.
I also thought you got well into Voldermort's head without really making him out of character, which is quite unusual. You kept that evil, but at the same time made him just a little more human.
Thank you very much for giving me the chance to read your wonderful story,
Charlie

Author's Response: Hi thanks for the review.

I'm glad that you liked the second person. I really wanted to make Voldy seem more human, make you empathize with him. I figured what better way to do that than if I made you Voldemort.

I've gone through and fixed some errors since you've read this, so hopefully the little minor errors have been cleaned up a bit.

On the capital H in Him. I did that on purpose, I realize that in the real world only Him as in God is capitalized, but I wanted to stress that to Voldemort he might view death as a sort of god. If you think about it he wouldn't really relate to God all that much. I mean being a mass murderer and all, but everything about his life seemed to relate in some way back to death. Him being an orphan, killing his grandfather, him becoming the Dark Lord. I wanted to kind of spin it so that the reader got that Voldemort sort of had an idolized view of death, but at the same time he never really knew him at all. That's sort of very out there, but it was what I was going at.

Again thanks for the review
-Liz

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