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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hello again!

I thought I'd start by saying how much I really love the length of your chapters. They're not too short and they're not too long. They're the perfect length. Enough to get information in without it seeming too much and enough to keep the readers interest. It's pretty amazing how you can do that.

Ooh everything is getting so serious! I love the turn of events in this chapter! It all started out smoothly, or as smooth as it could get and I feel like Lindsey's perspective in the beginning was foreshadowing of what would happen later on in the chapter. I don't know if you meant to do that on purpose or not but it happened.

Kudos to you either way haha. I love how Sirius' character is more and more defined as the chapters go on and the same for Lindsey. However, I would like to see the same happening for the rest of the characters. I know that the focus of the story is Sirius and Lindsey but the others are there as well.

I'm really pleased with this chapter. It was fun to read and interesting. The flow wasn't as great as it could have been at times. The order of events was good but I don't know, something about the flow just threw me off. So, I don't know why but I really like Regulus. Usually, it's Sirius that I adore but nope, it's Regulus this time.

Anyway, amazing chapter as usual! You rock deary :)

xx
-Marissa

Author's Response: Thank you for all of the lovely reviews. You, my dear, are wonderful. I actually didn't do that whole forshadowing thing on purpose. I realized it afterward and was kind of impressed with myself. ;). I was actually realizing yesterday that a lot of the other characters aren't getting so much screen time. I will fix it, no worries. The flow was probably a result of the weird spacing and the fact that this chapter was written over a really long period of time instead of all at once. I'll look into smoothing it out. :) It's kinda funny that you like him, because so do I. Can't help myself. Unfortunately, he's not much of a main character, though he'll be back.
Thank you for the splendid reviews!!
Hugs,
Lucky

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