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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hello, i'm here for your review!

I really like how this began. You descriptions were spot on and you really painted the emotion of that part really well. I could feel Rose's terror practically ooze from the page there. It was just so intense that i was sitting on the edge of my seat hoping for it to be a dream! Which is it was but maybe not for long. :D

I like what you've done here, i've not read any seer kind of stories before and i'm sure there are loads of them hanging about the archives but to me this is new and unique and i love how you've written this. Her uncertainty about the reality of the dream, how it keeps flashing before her eyes, and the quickness of the dream's outcome are all really brilliantly done!

Characterization wise, i think so far it is excellent! I like Scorpius here a lot, even if we juts get a small glimpse of him i like how you've done him. I've read a lot of this optimistic bubbly character or the complete push over (which I like just fine in fanon and it's adorable to read) but in my head canon your Scorpius seems a little more realistic. He is part of a gang and not the leader (which is really great and different) and it seems like he may have some of Draco's pretentiousness and arrogance in him.

Aria is really neat too, she seems, at this point, well rounded and interesting. I like her bluntness and her her and Rose's interaction in general. Rose seems normal here (well except for the seer bit) but she's wanting to pull pranks, has grudges that are realistic and she's not at an extreme where all Hogwarts loves her or hates her (which i've seen in too may stories).

Your flow was really nice too for the most part. I noticed there was a few run on sentences which seemed to disrupt the feelings of the piece so keep a watch out for those. Otherwise though, i liked how this read and it was quite beautifully done.

Thanks for requesting me and i hope you found this helpful! :P

-zayne

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