Hey! Pass the parcel~
This is fantastic! I know this isn't your most recent work, so maybe you would have preferred a review on your WIP instead, but I read the summary of this and couldn't resist! What an interesting idea for the plot - and one that makes me genuinely intrigued to find out more! I really loved this first chapter - the way you characterised Moody was absolutely brilliant and it all just felt absolutely real. There's a lot of heavy paragraphs here - but the way you wrote it made them compelling to read, I was really drawn in. You were kind of just telling us all about Moody, and lots of people do that in a boring way, but the way you told it was just so fascinating. And Moody is a really great character to explore - and I love what you've done with him.
Even in what is a more serious kind of fic, I still found bits amusing, such as Moody looking in magazines and newspapers for secret codes! He read them backwards, read them upside down and sometimes he only read every second word or the first word or letter of each line. Haha lol. And even more so with this! But he thought Lupin knew, Moody had given him a super-sensitive, highly advanced, limited-edition Sneakoscope for his birthday and if that didnít say: youíre my friend, I care, Moody didnít know what did. That definitely made me laugh a little. I really loved the interesting insight into Moody here - how he retired, (silly Scrimgeour!), the good stuff about Tonks and Lupin, and just how his life was at that time. Really, really well written and I'm definitely going to check out the next chapter of this when I have time! I really want to know what happens! Absolutely brilliant! :)
Author's Response: Hi there - no, you're grand, I am so happy you picked this story to review (just because no one really reads or reviews this story, I dunno if it's because Moody isn't a popular character to what, but there you are).
I am glad you liked this first chapter - it's more of a prologue really though. Originally this fic was just a one-shot, but it was nearly 8,000 words and I thought that was far too long for a one-shot so I split it into prologue and story.
I am glad you liked Moody's characterisation, he's my favourite character (after Lupin obviously, Lupin holds top spot because he's awesome!). I know there are a lot of heavy paragraphs and I'm sorry about that (but if you think they are bad now, you should have seen the first draft, the paragraphs were MONSTERS!) - it's not as bad in the next chapter. I just saw this as giving the reader an insight into Moody's mind and I tried to write it using his voice and the paragraphs just came out like that!
I am glad you liked the little bits of humour thrown in. I was going for that sort of mad genius idea, whose pure insanity is hilarious at times, so I am glad you liked that. Also glad you liked the comments on Lupin and Tonks too, I liked trying to view those two characters through Moody's eyes.
All I can say is thanks so much for such a lovely review. If you do indeed get around to chapter two, I hope you enjoy it!