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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
This is so cute! I just melted completely by the end, because your progression was just wonderful and you showed Lily, James and Sirius as a unit so perfectly before developing it all.

I loved your characterisation of Lily! She was strong and loving but still exasperated even in her annoyance. Her interactions with the other two seemed very real and relatable, and I loved how you showed the two sides of Lily's emotions side-by-side in a lovely contrast.

James and Sirius were just perfect, too! They were both silly and you wrote their ease with each other perfectly, but you still showed how it was James that was being nicer and was more on Lily's side, as the husband who loved her. It just made all three relate so well to each other, and I loved it!

It was really clever how you started fading in the legilimency, because at first I didn't notice anything out of the ordinary when Sirius responded to her thoughts, but as Lily came to realise, I backtracked and realised what was going on! Then when they wouldn't stop it, I empathised with Lily so much.

James and Lily's cute couple bit at the end was just fabulously fluffy and lovely; I adored how you showed Lily being swayed to James' side, and how they were so perfect together. It just made me awww so much!

Lovely, lovely job; I hope you write more Lily/James soon!
~TGK (Ravenclaw)

Author's Response: I hope you noticed that that was their last night ever. They died the next day Lottie. Waaahaaa *roll on the floor crying out loud* Why did they have to die? *sob*

I enjoy writing Marauders so much. Sirius *swoon* He's the love of my life. Also, my favourite ship is James/Lily so I love writing these three. This was an idea that suddenly came into my head. I love writing in Lily's POV but yeah I have to try James too.

I'm so glad you love my characterization. I pet Sirius too much and people are complaining. Hehe can't help it. I love him. But I'm trying to fan it down a bit.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. You reviews made my day Lottie :D

*Hugs*


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