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Review:angel_speaks says:
Emesias here with your requested review!

Grammar/ spelling: The only thing that I would like to mention on this area is that there are certain times when your tenses change. It's nothing to be worried about for now as there isn't much of that going on, but when it continues to happen in your other chapters, that's when it becomes distracting.

Characterization: I haven't read much of Gilderoy and Regulus at the archives especially with them being the main pair. With that being said on top of the description of their emotions that you put together, really makes your characters seem believable *two thumbs up* Their personalities really show through their emotions and their dialogue. If you'd like to stick to their canon, remember, Gilderoy is a self- serving man pretty much. If you can recall the things that he did during the CoS, it would show that Lockheart doesn't really care for anyone but himself and glory. I like the way you portrayed him here though as it remains consistent with your plot!

Reader's Interest: This chapter definitely was interesting! The only time that I'd ever read this genre is if somebody did drop a request on my thread (just honestly saying) but I do find them quite entertaining especially if they're written really well. I would like to read on with this one as well!

Overall, I think that you did a good job with this first chapter!

Happy Writing!

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