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Review:marissa lily potter says:
Hey there!

First of all, this was a really cute story. I absolutely adore Neville Longbottom eek! :) So just a few things that I noticed.

- "The journey home has been no different"
I think you meant to say "had been no different" because the next sentence uses past tense & it makes more sense to have it as "had".
- "the driving seat"
Did you mean "driver's seat"?
- You used "this" to describe a lot of objects such as the car and the bedroom & I think it would have been better to use the word "the".

But besides that, I think this story was absolutely adorable! When I read the diary entry, my eyes welled up with tears. It was sweet, thoughtful and full of emotion. You are a really good writer for bringing out those emotions. The story caught my attention and my attention was kept throughout the entirety of it.

I can't tell you how much I love it! Neville is so brave and I love how you characterized him. The flow of the story was great too. There were no parts that felt too choppy or anything. Overall, I enjoyed reading it very much! Great work!

-marissa lily potter

Author's Response: I edited all the mistakes and posted again. Well not me actually, I posted the beta'd version of the story so now no grammar mistakes :D Maybe is the best.

Awww thanks marissa. I cried while writing this *sob* I'm such a cry baby so thought it was just me being... A cry baby. I'm so glad that you guys found it emotional. :D

Thank you so much for reading an reviewing love :D

*Hugs*

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