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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Hi there - I'm here with your pass the parcel review.

I really liked the central concept in this fic - the split between Remus and the wolf. I really liked how you switched the point of view, one from Remus's and the other from the wolf's. I also thought it was really cool how you had the wolf encroach on Remus's mind, and how he fought it back when he thought of things he hated. Then, on the other side of things, I like how Remus invaded the wolf's mind slightly too - telling him not to leave the shack, and then being the "nagging" voice that told him not to attack James, Sirius and Peter.

Oh yeah, I also liked how you did McGonagall, how she was slightly nervous meeting him on the night of the full-moon, but at the same time was concerned about his well-being when she told him to be careful as he entered the shack.

I loved how you ended Remus's section with the words - I am a human-being. That was really powerful because that is the difference between Lupin and Greyback, Lupin does not embrace the monster at all.

I really liked the ending too - you set it up well for the next chapter, because it has that sort of cliff-hanger sense to it, making the reader wonder if he is in fact going to kill. That's a great way to keep the reader engaged.

I'm trying to think of constructive criticism to give you, but nothing is really coming to mind if I am honest with you! The only advice I can give is keep splitting the story between Remus and the wolf, because it's a very unique idea and it makes this story stand out. Good job! :-)

Author's Response: Heya! Thanks for the pass the parcel review! :D

The split between Remus and Wolf was really brought on by the Kitty Norville books I've been reading. The idea of actually going inside Remus' werewolf's head started intriguing me and that's how this story was born. I'm glad that you liked McGonagall...because she's one tough woman to write about! She's stern but you just know that she cares for her students and wants the best for them and I was trying to portray that.

Remus really hates being present around Wolf because he hates him. Plain and simple. So he rarely makes an appearance inside Wolf's head. Wolf, on the other hand, I see as Remus' wild side and he'll always plague his brain. He's Remus' opposite, in a way. At least that's how I see him.

Remus has to keep reminding himself that he is indeed human. He lives in a world where people view werewolves as monsters and he has to fight that same mentality about himself. He has this deep self hatred but he has to tell himself that despite everything he's still a human being.

Thanks for the review!! I really appreciate your thoughts on this chapter! :)


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