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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for Pass the Parcel!

This was a very interesting story. I liked your plot - the way you shed light on the moment leading to Neville shedding his fears and actually embracing the Gryffindor in him was very well done.

I liked your characterizations of Neville as well as his grandma. I think you've got them spot on, just like it would be in canon. The diary part was a nice addition to the story too, and it really added so much substance to Neville's transformation.

I loved the fact that Neville was using his father's wand, and that he decided to continue to do so. In that one diary piece, you portrayed Frank Longbottom awesomely too.

The house cup prompts were woven into the story very nicely and subtly, and I liked that.

The best thing that I loved about this story though was Neville's 'comparison' with the dragon. Being the Dragon of his dad's heart was a very innovative and interesting idea, and I felt really touched while reading it - the father son bond was so beautiful.

All in all, this was one great piece of writing. good work!

10/10

cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Awww thanks AD :D this is so far my favourite and the only thing I'm proud of and I'm glad you guys like it too. I'm very metaphorical but this was the first time I used it. have to use it more. And I've been writing romance all this time. better switch to tearjerkers :D I think I'm at least marginally good at that.

Thank you for the lovely review AD as always :D

*Hugs*


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