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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
hey its Whiskey back for one last review!

I still like your style a lot! The moment when Daphne finally taps into her power was very dynamic and unexpectedly visual (like in a film). It was a really great bit of writing, and I wouldn't change a thing! :D

I must admit though, that I found the physical interaction between Daphne and Callum a bit forced (he seems kind of...sleazy, constantly invading her personal space like that. But he is a controlling type of guy, and it can be an attractive quality)...maybe if he was less flirtatious at times, we could experience his touchy-feelyness in a different context and then everything he does may appear more natural. Or, make him even more forward, thus informing the reader that he is naturally a bit of a seducer.

It was a really nice touch with the cloaked stalker at the end! This is just the right time to add some more action and drama and to widen the horizons of the new magical world that Daphne is learning about, so yay!

Keep it up, this seems to be a really promising story so far!! Feel free to rerequest once you have more chapters and I'll gladly read a few more ;)
cheers!

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