|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
Hi! I'm from Pass the Parcel, and wow am I glad I posted below you! Your story summary is hilarious, by the way, and quite intriguing. Makes me curious to see more!
Right off the bat I could tell that I was going to like this. Your language and grammar are professional, sophisticated, and everything is arranged with obvious care. It makes for smooth but thought-provoking reading. It could be so easy to botch something like this - a foreigner coming out of nowhere to teach at Hogwarts, but the way you executed the idea makes it impossible to doubt. Clio is mysterious but not overly-so, and her underlying desperation to secure the job balances well with the calm exterior she tries to show Dumbledore. Already, I feel like I am learning more about her.
One of the things that impressed me the most was how thorough you are! You explained everything clearly instead of rushing through it, not leaving the actual interview to be vague or stray off-topic to matters not pertaining to the job title (which could be tempting, I think, for other writers to do). Every question Dumbledore asked her made me think, "Yes, this is so plausible! Yes, that's exactly what he would have said." Clio certainly seems to know her stuff about Runes, and her background sounds rich and interesting. Moreover, she doesn't have some special connection to Dumbledore, which is a major relief because that is the tip of the Mary Sue iceberg. I think it's safe to say that you have definitely avoided having a Mary Sue character!
I also like Dumbledore's cryptic inquiry about her preferences with working with werewolves or Death Eaters. What a fascinating staff, indeed. XD
Back to the minor details because I love them so much: The contract. It might seem odd that this was one of my favorite parts of the chapter, but it's little things like that, so thoroughly planned-out and realistic with the probationary year-long contract followed by a possible long-term contract based on staff recommendations and such, that completely bring a story to life. I could feel Clio's nerves, her anticipation, her eagerness that she tried to downplay. And all of this was wrapped up in one hundred percent convincing dialogue and imagery. Love it, love it, love it. And if my eyes don't deceive me, I do believe this is Remus/OC? WHICH EXCITES ME TO EXTREME LEVELS, I MUST SAY.
I will definitely come back and read this. :) 10/10
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for your review. :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the thought that I put into Clio's background.
Not every chapter may be quite as polished as this one, so if you do return to read more and find any issues then I am more than happy for you to point them out.
I'm lucky to have a couple of friends who are teachers; everything I know about the tenure process, teachers lives and so forth comes from them. They teach in the US, but I figure some aspects must be universal, and any liberties I take can be forgiven.
And , err, yes, there is a Remus/OC pairing :) :) ... I don't want to give too much away, but I tried to develop the relationship in it an a realistic, in-character way.
Thanks for reading, and I hope you will return!