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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
Hi, Shortie! I got you for Pass the Parcel, and was excited to finally get around to reviewing this! I've read it before, but at the time I was rushing through a ton of stories before Gryffindor voting, so unfortunately didn't get the time to review.

I really like how you used the prompts, especially the dragon being very figurative rather than literal. The dragon of his father's heart was a unique touch, and I especially like the ending where you say 'The dragon has awoken'. Goosebump moment!

I caught a few typos, and noticed that you say 'defiled' instead of 'defied', like with "defiled the Dark Lord twice". Two very different meanings! To defy is to boldly resist something, and to defile is to sully something or rob it of virtue, to take away its innocence. You might consider editing that.

Frank's diary was a very emotional scene. I think it's something Neville very much needed to hear. I like the way Frank regarded his son, even if he did seem to have a suspicious amount of foresight about how Harry and Neville would turn out in the future, and mentioning being tortured into insanity by the Cruciatus Curse.

My favorite part of this story was Augusta. I really like her - I thought she was very canon. You did an excellent job with her character because she's a fine line to walk between caring grandmother and her no-nonsense, strict personality. Their moment together in the car where Neville tells her that Voldemort is back, and she questions how he knows this and he says Dumbledore said so, and Harry saw it happen, and she says "That's good enough for us", I felt was the absolute perfect thing to say. By grouping herself with Neville in the 'us', she would have made him feel more of a connection with her, like the two of them were now going to trot off to Harry's side like little soldiers. It made me so proud of Augusta and Neville both. :) We know in canon that Harry had their unfailing support, and it was nice to see that brought to life here.

A very enjoyable read. :)

Author's Response: Aww thanks Sara. I know, the defied thing has been pointed out so much, but my beta is still going through the story, so I thought of resubmitting the completely done chapter rather than submitting over and over again. So have to wait till that version comes.

I know! I made the Frank's foresight part a bit too cliche but... but... I don't know what came over me. Sort of loved writing that part (I know, dramatic I am!) But... naah I have nothing to say in my defense :(

I'm so glad you liked it Sara. Thank you for the lovely review. These reviews make my day :D


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