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Review:StormThief17 says:
Hey StormThief here with your review! Sorry I'm a bit late :p

I'll just go through each of the things on your list!

Characterisation: So far so good! Its kind of hard to tell with only one chapter, but I already love Lucy's attitude! She's really funny, and her thoughts are very real. I especially liked the bit about living up to Percy's expectations. I think that is definitely something Percy's daughter would struggle with. As for everyone else, they seem fine! I'll be able to give more specific thoughts on them in future chapters.

Flow/pacing:I think its great. I really liked the shopping scene--anything to do with weddings just makes me squee! Anyway, it was very smooth and I never got lost or confused by anything, which is always a plus! I don't think you spent too much or too little time on anything either.

Grammar/spelling mistakes:Grat job on this too! The only thing(and I don't even know that it's a mistake) is all the dashes you put. I think its worth looking up where you actually need them--for example: back-and-forth I think can just be back and forth. I might be totally wrong on that though so I'd suggest googling it!

Plot holes: I don't spot anything ;)

Reader interest: I am very interested! I'm definitely pulled in with the first chapter

Plot in general: There's not a lot to say with this only being chapter 1, but it looks like you've set up a good story!

Does anything seem too confusing: Nope :)

Too filler'y: Definitely not! Its always good to lay down the foundation for the story in the first chapter and start introducing characters.


I can't wait to read more! Nice job ^_^

Author's Response: Sorry I didn't respond to this yet, I didn't notice it at all! :p Well, you most definitely covered everything I asked for opinions on, and I definitely get what you mean about the dashes. I think I overuse them too much -.- Someday, I'm really going to go back to this story, and revamp and edit a load of things until I'm happy with it, so thanks for the advice! :) Definitely re-requesting for the next chapter.

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