Just throwing this out there in reference to your review request, stalking my thread is always acceptable. :3 And also throwing out there that your banner for this story is gorgeous. And now that that's out of the way, onto your actual review!
I actually got really excited to see that this was another thing of yours set in the rain. Is that bad? You have such a lovely way of describing it, and I can tell that (as you said) you love doing it. And I was quite struck at the differences in this and chapter three of Magnolia Street, all the same. With Scorpsander, rain was cozy and thick and warm, or provided a way to that end. Here it made the entire story seem barren and hopeless. I adore that versatility; you definitely didn't go overboard in describing it!
I don't the dialogue was at all stilted, either. Is it okay if I dislike Dean a little bit here? Because... I kind of do. -shifty look- He's acting solely on his own wants and needs without any thought for Daphne, and it's so clear that that is the last thing she needs. I really felt for her in this, and somehow, I don't think Dean's going to make her happy, which just kills me more. Gahh. I have all these feelings now, and it's your fault! (In the best way, dear -- I wouldn't have it any other way.)
Your writing is so lovely. The more I'm exposed to it, first through Scorpsander (a term I am coining) and now this, the more I enjoy it. :3 I can't wait to see what you've got in store for me next! Thank you for requesting a review fro me! ♥
Author's Response: Just give me a second to drool all over the keyboard. In the most ladylike of fashions, of course. Because, Wizard-God, thank you! Your review made me both laugh and melt at the same time, which was just... gah. Thank you, again.
I regularly stalk the Up For Grabs section at TDA, and this banner was one such thing that I snapped up. Most of the time, I'll write half a story and then, when I find a banner I really like for it, I'll finish it. Anyway, moving on...
Ha, I'm a little obsessed with the rain. Maybe it's because I grew up in the rain and will be attending college where it rains a lot, but either way, it's one of my little... yeah, obsessions. I can't seem to get over it. I am absolutely, 100% thrilled that you found the differences between this rain and the other rain (that's kind of an odd sentence, but just... go with it). I'm also really glad that I didn't go overboard, because I tend to do that with descriptions I really like (ie: the rain).
Ha, it's definitely OK that you didn't like Dean. I don't think you're supposed to, honestly. He's not written in a way to make you like him at all, so I think if you DID like him, there would be something wrong. :P
Thank you, thank you, thank you! Your reviews are so thoughtful and I just want to read them over and over again. Stalking your review thread definitely pays off.