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Review:atellam says:
Okay, so if you disregard the fact that none of this could have happened at Hogwarts, and everything else, then I found this strangely addicting. O.o

Normally I don't like stories like this - I find them too 'Americanised', but this is fun. It's nothing like Hogwarts, and only when you ignore that and read it as it's own story can you enjoy it, but yeah.

One thing that has been really, really bugging me though (and don't take this personally, I'm just a grammar nazi) is your grammar and punctuation. You miss a lot of full stops, random words are capitalized in the middle of a sentence, while names aren't, you don't start a new line when someone is talking and you often forget to use commas where they should be used. You can still read the story - obviously, because I've read all the way up to here - but grammar and punctuation just make it so much easier for the reader to know what's going on. As I said, don't take it personally, I'm just pointing it out so you know where to improve. Readers (ones like me anyway) will usually disregard a story within the first chapter if they find it hard to read. :/

Anyway, that aside, as I said, this is fun and really light hearted. I'm looking forward to an update from you soon, because despite the constructive criticism I mentioned above, I'm enjoying this. I just wanted to point out some ways that might get you more readers. (The editing option is your best friend :P)

Anywho, keep up the good work. Hopefully what I've said is somewhat helpful!
- Adele :) x

Author's Response: Hi Adele,
Thank you so much for taking time to review! I know, my story is nothing like Hogwarts which is why i find it intriguing. My grammar is ridiculous, i'm so bad at it. When i have time to edit i will change all mistakes or i might find a beta because i cant improve it myself haha. Thank you so much for the constructive criticism, i do appreciate it and keep reading! x

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