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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! You are getting these chapters posted at a blistering pace lately! It's so much fun, being along for the ride.

Poor Hermione. Such a horrible feeling to suddenly find yourself all alone in a strange place with everything familiar and necessary torn away. At least she still has her wand.

I absolutely loved this line: "Don't answer that," she snapped at herself hastily. "That was a purely rhetorical question, not a show me proof one."

You sort of left us hanging as she enters the diner. Why do I have a sneaking suspicion that the waitress is going to give her the keys to Dageus's car and the two of them are going to miss each other in passing?

The conversation between Dageus and Godric was very different than their first. If there was one thing about this chapter that seemed a bit... abrupt, it was the way that their conversation suddenly became rather familiar, almost collegial, compared to the way that Godric completely blows Dageus off in the village. Granted, Godric is in a significantly disadvantaged position at this point, but Dageus isn't and he also seems to almost obey Godric instinctively. I guess I would have expected him to feel more put out and take longer to warm up.

Anyway, the dialog between the two of them was humorously practical in nature. It isn't often that you'll have a conversation with a thousand-year-old man in an enchanted mirror about something as pedestrian as the sun.

Drustan seems like an amiable fellow. It's interesting that he's married to a muggle, or perhaps a witch who simply took a liking to the natural sciences. If Hermione could decide to abandon magic and become an archaeologist, anything is possible.

Your writing was terrific in this chapter. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it.

You've mentioned in a few responses that the story is coming to an end soon. I'm very curious to see how you tie it all up!

Author's Response: I didn't realize how different the conversation between the two of them was so different. Thank you for pointing that out, I will have to go back and double check that section. I can't tell you anything about what is going to happen when she enters the diner, if I did that would take all the fun out of it. The next chapter should be going into the queue sometime today or tomorrow, so should be viewable within a week at most.
Drustan's wife is a squib, who decided to study physics when she couldnt do magic, I guess I need to go back and explain that better.
Dageus wife Jenna is a muggleborn witch, I need to go back and make sure that was illustrated correctly. Thank you so much for your insight.


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