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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hi! I'm here again for a review on yet another wonderful chapter!

Finally, the two main characters of the story cross paths! It's just so thrilling! And when I knew this was going to happen from your request post, I found myself wondering whose point of view this chapter was going to be told from! As entertaining as Regulus's point of view usually is, I really enjoyed reading this chapter from Lily's.

In your last response, you were hoping to find out a way to make Lily just as likable as Regulus is, but I don't think you should worry about that at all! I think that the big fascination with seeing things through Regulus's eyes has more to do with how he's rarely brought up in stories and less to do with the fact that your Lily isn't as wonderful. Because she is wonderful and I just love her!

And I really loved the opening scene! I loved how you portrayed what a typical school day at Hogwarts is like for Lily. It's always nice to see what goes on within the walls of the class room rather than just the strolls across the Quidditch pitch or conversations between classes in the corridors. I also really loved that you brought McGonagall along in this chapter because she's one of my favourite characters. It was nice to see her care so much about how knowledgeable the students should be about the current situation and everything.

Also, the moment after class, when Sirius interacted with Lily... I really adored that too! The way you've described his usual attitude towards her and how it was different from the way he addressed her now -it really is interesting! It makes wonder about what has accounted for the change.

As for the Slug Club part, it was a classic! First of all, I admire how you've remembered to include Lily's sentiments about being in the same room with Severus for so long, how it made her doubt if she should go. It made me pity Severus even more than I already do!

I also liked how you've described Lily's experience through out the meal and how you went on from one course to the next! It was really enjoyable for some reason!

The conversation between Lily and Regulus was, in fact, very entertaining. For a moment, I felt like they were a bit too amiable but then resolved to thinking that Lily seemed eager to get to know Regulus and see how he's different from Sirius. You've also reinforced that in the end by saying how intrigued she was by someone who knew both Sirius and Severus.

In case it isn't obvious by now, I really, really love this story and it always makes me get excited and eager to know more! As always, you're more than welcome to re-request for the next chapter since I really am excited to read it! Keep up the marvellous work!

-Manno

Author's Response: Hi Manno! Thanks for coming by again :)

I think you made a good point about Regulus - he's definitely featured in fewer stories than Lily, so maybe the novelty is what's behind his draw. I'm happy to hear that you feel like Lily is written well in her own right, though.

I'm glad you liked the opening scene and the way the Marauders and Lily reacted to it. It's great that you picked up on the changing attitude between the Marauders and Lily. I'm sure that James's friends would have wanted to follow suit and do what they could to help him attempt to woo Lily, at least in the more serious moments. Lily and Sirius will have an interesting sort of friendship in this story, too.

I'm happy that you liked the Slug Club scene, too. It was fun to throw a little humor in there with Peeves and be able to describe all the different people who were invited to the party. I agree that the interaction between Regulus and Lily may have been a little too light, but fear not, there are more dramatics to come!

Thanks so much for another lovely review :)

-Amanda


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