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Review:potterfan310 says:
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This is beautiful! and very well written. I thought it was James and Lily at first, but then when it said Draco at the end I realsied it was Lucius and Narcissa.

I thought it was J/L because of the little boy on the broomstick and we know that Harry had a toy broomstick when he was that age so it totally shocked me at the end.

You have portrayed Narcissa really well. Any mother would be scared for their child's life.

You have shown that Narcissa really loves her son.
You have deffinatly shown a different side to them young, caring, in love and will do anything to protect their child.

Tip -
- Draco's eyes are grey not blue.
- Last line - there needs to be a 'She' before needed

I will be adding it to my favourites :D
-Potterfan310

Author's Response: Hello, darling! Thank you for this wonderful review! I think I went a bit too literal in this, because babies/toddlers eyes can darken up until they are a year and a half, I figured keeping them at blue as opposed to such an odd color would be more natural. I think I'm going to need to change that though because it isn't something people usually thing about, haha!

Thanks again!!
Jami


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