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Review:Cavell says:
Ooh! Another fantastic chapter :D According to the scrolling bar on the side of the page, this was quite a long chapter, but somehow, it was a really quick read for me :p Time flies when you're having fun and whatnot, and the saying definitely applies to this. You have a very fresh style of writing - most get on with the dramatics, but you take time to get on with the normal-ness of everyday Hogwarts life before you throw us in to the sharks, and I really like reading that. It's definitely a nice change.

I did like the class scene. I was suspicious of McGonagall, too, like Lily, wondering why she was being so soft and hesitant and quiet all of the sudden, though the reason for it made sense in the end. One of the ways you can get people to take you seriously is if somehow, the situation hits a little closer to home than anyone would have liked. I like the Slug Club, too! And the idea of it being set in the Trophy Room was a very nice twist, so well done! I'm surprised Severus wasn't there, but I suppose I'm so used to it being written that I kind of expected it, though I don't have any complaints.

Some people get along instantly, or at least, better than with others, so I'm taking that as the case between Lily and Regulus. Kind of how I would act around a person I haven't really talked to properly, before, which I really liked because you make everything so real, and so effortlessly, too! To cut all of my ramblings short, this was another amazing chapter, and I can't wait to see what the next one holds. Feel free to re-request, but even if you didn't, I'd go read it for myself anyway :p

--Linn

Author's Response: Hi Linn! Thanks for coming by once again, and I'm very glad that you're still enjoying the story!

This one was a bit on the longer side, but I'm pleased to hear that the flow still worked for you and you had fun reading it. That's a huge compliment that you've given me, and I really appreciate it! As you can see from my author page, I've only just begun to really work on longer stories, and so keeping things fresh is something of which I have been trying to remain conscious.

I'm glad that you liked the opening and the Slug Club scene. You're absolutely right about Severus, and I'm glad you noticed. I'll touch on that point in a chapter that is coming soon.

It's good that you felt like the interaction between Lily and Regulus was realistic. I didn't want to make it too intense (i.e., him yelling at her just for existing as a Muggleborn), and I obviously didn't want them to just ignore each other. You kind of captured it perfectly - they're just acquaintances that Slughorn introduced to one another, and they're still feeling each other out, maybe even a bit suspiciously.

Thanks so much for another lovely review! I'm sure I'll be by to re-request quite soon :)

-Amanda


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