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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! I saw this posted a couple of days ago and I've been reading it on my phone. Had to wait until I got in front of a computer to review, though. I just can't write anything long with my thumbs.

Katherine has such good friends! They stick by her, even when she seems to be trying so hard to shut everyone out. Lee's persistence in the face of her frustration and even hostility was very loyal if not exactly wise. ;)

Her reaction to the small reminder of her uncle was interesting. It suddenly seemed to dawn on her that there was a good reason that he withheld the truth from her, and she seemed to forgive him just a bit.

I really, really wish you'd gone into some detail about the Quidditch match against Slytherin. Even though we already know how it ended, it would have been nice to have seen some of it from Katherine's point of view. I'm sure the Slytherins were being extra-nasty toward her and, as a chaser, she's much less insulated from it than Harry, who's flying high above the action, looking for the Snitch.

After it's over, she walls herself off once again. In the face of her break-up, I could see why she wouldn't want the company, but the poor girl is just tormenting herself at this point.

I guess my main constructive criticism would be that this chapter felt very spartan. There wasn't a whole lot going on, and the most interesting event was only referenced. If it was me, I would have considered rolling this one together with the one before it.

That said, I'm really excited to see the pace pick up and everything start to come together. You've woven so many mysterious little details into the story. I can't wait to see how all the pieces fit!

Author's Response: Hello again :) Don't I'm useless typing with my thumbs (and having long nails sure doesn't help my case :P)

Part of the story is supposed to be about friendship and I thought it was high time I demonstrated some, because I remember someone mentioning once that I should include more of the girls which I'm definitely trying to do.

I wanted to include her uncle even if for a moment, the man has a soft spot in my heart.

Oh if you read this before I post the next chapter I rewrote this because I hadn't included the match because I didn't have my POA copy around. (I wanted to stick as close to canon as possible)

The pieces are going to start fitting soon (hopefully :P) I'm not a heavy planner so I'm going to have to re-read everything in order to make sure I know everything (or find my notebook whatever comes first :P) I know I've said it before but thank you for your reviews and all your CC


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