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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi! I came across your previous story, Consumed, while searching for Remus fics and after reading that one decided to check out the sequel.

I like Freddy as a character because of her flaws. I find it hard to write flaws into my protagonists, so it's really refreshing to see a character that is far from perfect but still a good person with admirable qualities.

Okay, here's the really strange thing: part of what got me hooked on your stories was her illness. I haven't had TB, but I've actually undergone two pleurodesis procedures (one on each lung) and let's just say that I never expected to ever see this procedure mentioned in a story, ever (I never even heard it mentioned on House, which I watched religiously). So, props to you!

If I have one nitpicky issue, it's that if she has only one lung (I've still got both of mine, but one was completely collapsed for a while, effectively leaving me with one) she's not going to be able to walk up stairs unaided unless she'd been given some sort of lung-strengthening potion or an oxygen charm or something. Even walking across a room is going to be very taxing for her without some sort of magical intervention. When I was in the hospital recovering from my procedures, I was given various breathing toys to help improve my lung capacity, perhaps the healers could give her a magical version to work with?

Crane really gives me the creeps ... partially because he looks like Carlisle Cullen, but mainly because of his possessiveness.

I like your portrayal of Remus here, he's less flaky in your story then people typically make him out to be. I hope she ends up taking him to Greece. :)

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