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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
Well I'm so sorry that it has taken me this long to be able to finally complete our review swap but alas I'm here! Really I just have one word to say... WOW! The description and emotional punch that this story had was just wonderful!

I really loved the idea behind this story.. that draco was in love with daphne but she ended up being killed in the war and that he has never really gotten over her even though he was engaged to her sister. The ending was pretty heartbreaking with her admitting that she does really love him but that she can't stand competing with a ghost and knowing that her love with him will never reach what his had with her sister.

I only found a couple of mistakes throughout the chapter. In this part "The hot, pounding sensation of it grabbed hold of her soul and forced her attention to it." you missed the a for ahold. In this part, "her blue sin found a pair of hazel that sat across the room, taking in the sight of her" I'm not sure what blue sin means or if its supposed to be blue eyes but I figured I would point it out. Really thats not bad to have only found the two errors so great job!

I really enjoyed reading this! It was so emotional and good it really did suck me in once I got started! Great Job on such a wonderful one shot!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Thank you so much ♥ this was a very interesting story to write. I felt so very bad for both of them all the way through. I mean, he loves Daphne and Astoria, just not that once in a life time kind of love he had for Daphne... she loves her sister and her fiance, she can't even hate the 'other woman' because that other woman is her dead sister.. gahh just so much complication!

Ohh thank you for pointing out the A :)!

With the blue sin, I was working off the previous descriptions where it talks about her eyes being the color of purity but it the looks that she gave from them were that of sin :).

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this! I really love this short story for some reason!!

Let me know if you ever want to do another swap :). ♥

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