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Review:Cavell says:
Urgh. I took forever in getting to this review, so sorry about that, Amanda! At least I'm here now, no? I love your Regulus - have I mentioned that yet. I want to give him a great big squish - he's not like anyone else's Regulus, all cold and aloof and whatnot, yours is more like a real teenage boy with the whole Black and Slytherin factor added in. I love your characters, because you make them what they are - kids. Even the other Slytherins, like Wilkes, stuffing everything into his mouth and not waiting for Dumbledore to finish his speech :p I liked Slughorn, too, and I hold a certain amount of distaste for Rosier and Avery and Mulciber, of course.

Oh, and Severus! I did like him too - very awkward and very Snape in general. I think some people have him as close to Regulus, or something like that? However, after reading yours and thinking about it properly a bit, this makes more sense, probably knowing each other by name but not really talking, and I loved the library scene :) You have a talent with descriptions which I absolutely adore (and envy). Oh, and I also loved all of your characters' names ;)

No mistakes as of yet, so well done, because you haven't mentioned having a beta at all! Another lovely read, I say, so thanks for requesting and letting me discover such a fantastic story! I patiently await your re-request, and I can't wait to see what the next chapter has in store for Lily and Regulus. You're alternating between the two of them, right?

--Linn

Author's Response: Well, it certainly didn't feel like forever to me! I really appreciate you coming by again!

It's great that Regulus and his friends worked well for you. I was a little worried that I had made Wilkes too much like Ron, what with the appetite and comic relief, so I'm trying to pull him away from that as I move on through the story. I definitely wanted Regulus to feel very real, with his doubts and confusing feelings and desire to just be a free, happy young man. Just like with any other young man, I imagined that the best parts of his life at this time involved playing Quidditch, visiting Hogsmeade, and flirting with cute girls. I like him a lot, too, so I kind of wish that I could leave him like that, but sadly, canon calls :(

I sort of like the idea of Snape and Regulus being friends, but in my mind, that wouldn't have really developed seriously until they both were initiated into the Death Eaters, just because they have that measure of doubt in common. Right now, I tried to convey that they know of each other (since Hogwarts is only so big), but that they aren't best friends. In fact, you might say that Regulus is a bit curious about Severus, or at least that's how his behavior seemed to turn out for me. It's great that you liked the library scene and felt like it worked well with Snape's character.

Nope, no beta - just me. I promise it's not perfect, but the technical stuff does seem to be a strength of mine. Yes, I've been trying to alternate between them, though I'm not necessarily sticking to that strictly the whole way. The next chapter does come from Lily's point of view, though, so I hope you enjoy it.

Thanks again! I'll be by to re-request soon :)

-Amanda


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