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Review:CharlieDay says:
Hi! It's me, with your requested review!
The imagery and description in this is absolutely wonderful, it's very artistic! For a prologue, this is wonderfully descriptive and definitely gives the reader a good idea of the story, as well as keeping the story very open to different manners of developement. I remember an English Teacher of mine once said to me 'The most Important part of the story is the first chapter- it must hook the reader in. This story certainly did that for me.
I noticed very few problems with this chapter, however, I don't think that the way you said 'my friends wrote me' reads quite right. Also, and this is a very small thing, I don't really think 'going steady' is really a term used in England.
Another great thing I noticed about this story was the flow of it. It was very smooth, and all the paragraphes seemed to fit together like puzzle pieces.
Lastly, I'd like to say that it was a very realistic characterisation of a 15 year old, in my opinion. Though I'm not one myself, I think that her thoughts were very like mine at that age!
Feel free to come back and re-request, as I'd definitely be happy to read any future chapters!
Thank you so much for being my first requester,

Author's Response: Thanks!

I'm glad you think its artistic--I'm usually more of a humor writer so it was hard for me to be more serious! I definitely agree that chapter one should hook people in!

Hmm okay I'll see if I can fix those.

I'm a bit older than 15, but its recent enough for me to remember pretty well I think!

No problem :) I'll let you know when I get more chapters up

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