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Review:SiriuslyPeeved says:
I enjoyed this chapter thoroughly. The characterizations of Hagrid and the various professors are fabulous and the blend of suspense and comedy works very nicely. Clio has a funny, snappy sensibility even when telling off a Dementor, I'm really growing fond of her. I want to move into that apartment, though I, also, would likely kill the house plants!

Snape being likened to a "goth" by Charity made me giggle and is entirely in character! I love when stories about characters with Muggle-world connections mention them. I hadn't thought "emo" was around as a word back then but I did a little reading and prevented my own nitpicky CC ;)

The one suggestion I do have would be to transform some more of the relating of Clio's tales about her school years, etc. to conversations with Charity. I loved that she didn't really get a chance to talk to Hagrid about anything other than animals :)

I'm getting hooked on this story, thanks for the fun read!

Author's Response: Thanks again! I'm glad that you're enjoying it.

Sticking to pop culture references that fit with the 90s has been a challenge (yay for the Internet!). I've tried not to include glaringly anachronistic slang, so if you catch anything please point it out!

I get what you mean about including more of the stories in their conversations! I've never been super comfortable writing dialog, but working on this has gotten me to try harder, and I will definitely keep that in mind as I go through and edit.


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